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“Step. Aside.” Modeste’s steely face matched his cold, clear voice.

His wife’s black eyes narrowed as she spread her arms to bar the door. “You will not leave me.”

“Lenore,” he sighed, placing the tall top hat on his black and grey hair. “I’m just going to visit some friends, and I expect to be back this evening.”

She held up a small piece of paper with a heavy sigh.

He tore the note from her hand with a glare. “Where did you find that?” he hissed, patting his shirt pockets in shock.

“Does it matter?” she asked. Her shoulders hunched in defense as he stepped toward her. “It’s from Pyotr; you’re off to ‘elope’ with him now or whatever it is you’re calling it, am I wrong?”

As she spoke, he calmly folded the letter and slipped it into his coat pocket, keeping his green eyes glued to the wooden floorboards. His shoes seemed exceptionally black and shiny; when was the last time he wore shoes this clean? In fact, now that he thought about his current wardrobe, when was the last time he took the time to comb his hair back, or to wear a coat and tighten his necktie, before today? He vaguely wondered how his wife could be so upset with him while he looked so goddamned dashing.

Lenore scoffed at his silence, and clenched her jaw edgily. “Modeste, you cannot be serious about this. You can’t just get up and leave anymore. Things are different now; you have a family. You have a son. What will I tell Ludovic when he asks where his father is? That he’s off fornicating with a man, and he didn’t love us enough to stay?”

“Well,” Modeste answered without thinking, “I’m sure you’ll have to tell him something like that eventually. I have something of a reputation, you see.” He winced guiltily.

“Yes, I’m aware of that,” she hissed venomously, spreading her arms across the doorway. “But the fact remains that I lo—“

“I’m afraid I don’t see what the problem is. Husbands and wives split all the time, darling. You cannot stop me, so step aside before you make me angry,” he spat.

“Don’t make me say it again.”

“Lenore,” he snapped.

“I love you.”

He felt the prickling adrenaline running through him more intensely than usual. His hands were twitching, curling in and out of fists. This woman stood between him and Pyotr; she had to go. The wiry muscles in his arm tightened. He wondered what she would do if he hit her. Too softly, and she would come after him. If he hit hard enough, it would certainly knock her out, but too hard, and she could be seriously injured. Then again, once he made his escape, was her broken nose really his concern? He could make it quite a long way before she regained consciousness. There was only one option, then: hit her hard.

Her eyes widened, then shut tightly as his large hand came toward her face. A small noise came from the stairwell, causing him to jerk back and his strike to fall short. His neck cracked audibly as he whipped around to glare at the sound on the flight of stairs. A small boy, no more than two or three years of age, had rested himself at the bottom step, half of his tiny hand stuck in his mouth. His flat, black eyes stared up at them innocently.

“Ludovic,” Lenore whispered shakily, closing the distance between them quickly. “What…what do you want?” A small chill ran up her spine as she passed her husband’s stiff form.

The boy merely smiled and held out his arms. As she bent down to pick him up, she heard the front door swing open and slam shut violently. A heavy sigh escaped her lips.

“It’ll be alright,” she murmured. “At least you won’t miss him.”
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2nd entry, Lust Part 1 (of 2)

TL;DR
Modeste receives a letter from his "ex", asking him to leave his wife so they can get back together again. Modeste, completely seduced by the idea of returning to his old lifestyle, wastes no time in taking off. Lenore's been forgiving in the past, but now that they have a son, she's not as quick to let him go and just hope he'll return.

I kind of like this. I wanted to do something of a combination of actual sexual seduction, and abstract seduction (like, being seduced by the idea of something, idk.)
I DUNNO, I JUST LIKE MAKING MODESTE HAVE GRAY HAIR AND LENORE BE MISERABLE.

Part 2: [link]

Thank you ~tetsuyayamatashi, ~Teh-Stripe and ~Tiuni for helping me out so much <3
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:iconhaleo08:
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Oh, Wow.
LOOOOOVElove.
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:iconkurzstoff:
xD Thank you, I thinks, lol.
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:icontetsuyayamatashi:
OMG. I love this ending SO much more than the other one. Not that I didn't like the other ending-ish, but I adore this one. This just feels so real and identifiable. I really feel for the characters, especially Lenore. And yet, somehow, you've even made Modeste identifiable. Which is a very strange thing seeing as how I want to cripple kick him right now.

Modeste's temper really surprised me. Who'd a thunk it?
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:iconkurzstoff:
Lol, that seemed to be the reaction: cripple kicking Modeste, and being surprised by his temper. Why is that? XD Is he presented as a friendly sort of person?? Why is his temper such a surprised??? D:

But thank you so much <3333
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:icontetsuyayamatashi:
Well, he's always so happy and gay in your drawings so far. So it was like WOAH. Modeste is going to kick ass, yo.
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:iconkurzstoff:
Oh, haha, well yeah. Serves me right for only drawing him in one mood in the drawings. XD
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:icontiuni:
*Tiuni Sep 19, 2008  Student Digital Artist
GODDAMMIT MODESTE

Anyway, I love the struggle you wrote in this. I really feel for Lenore. :heart:
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:iconkurzstoff:
SUCH A BITCH I KNOW.

Thank you, darling.
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:iconripper-roo:
aw, poor Lenore! D: man, never would've guessed that Modeste could be such a meanie.
very intense writing! suits the theme really well. C:
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:iconkurzstoff:
Haha, I know! He's got such a horrible temper!!

Thank you very much! :D
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